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bluemoonrabbit's review
adventurous
fast-paced
- Plot- or character-driven? Plot
- Strong character development? Yes
- Loveable characters? It's complicated
- Diverse cast of characters? No
- Flaws of characters a main focus? It's complicated
2.25
If I have to read "my fated one" one more time I may rip out my hair.
The book was mostly fast paced (minus some slog in the middle), especially fast at the end, it could have benefitted from more pages, I really wanted to like this book, in fact, the first 40% was enjoyable, and the book initially sat at 4 stars. The beginning really caught my attention, I loved the idea of Sai being a matchmaker and the opening scene was very well done in my opinion, a great way to open a book, but by the 40% mark the story starts slowly crumbling apart until it becomes a complete mess by the end. Specifically,it all fell apart when Jyn got injured in the desert (according to the notes past me made at least).
I am not sure where to even begin with this book, so I guess I will start with the horrendous prose. I did not notice it in the beginning, the writing seemed fine initially, but the more I read, the more annoying and juvenile it was, the prose is just so crap and I can't put into words why, it is just such poor quality. The dialogue is bad too, it is unnatural for one, but once Sai finds Jyn it gets even worse. I could go on and on about how much I hated Sai's use of petnames, he didn't even pick one pet name, he called Jyn every crappy nickname under the sun and the author always inserted them not only into the most awkward unnatural places, but the sheer quantity of the petnames made me want to put the book down forever.
The petnames are made even worse by the fact that their love feels so half baked and forced to begin with, the worst thing about reading this book was the fact I would read a passage and see what exactly the author was trying to do, convey, set up, and not in a good way, I would read a crappy paragraph and go "I see she is trying to set up Sai to have xyz personality and bring that back later in the book". I should not be able to pick apart a book like that when I am casually reading in bed.
This kind of like transparent writing made it really hard to believe they liked eachother, it was so instalove, which I don't even hate, and it technically makes sense here but it was still hard to read, especially because there was a grumpy sunshine trope shoehorned in, made worse by Jyn's very rough and awkward transition from "Go away Sai" to "I love you". All just so...unbelievable?
The characters were half baked too, all of them but especially the supporting cast. Captain Tian and his relationship to Sai made no sense, Feng was annoying andher death meant nothing , and that one weird cannibal guy was a wild card we did not need. The emperor's characterization sucked too. And Sai, that man was SO stupid and for what? For one, he can see red threads of fate but won't believe in shamans and dragon scales? He was also so stupid for punching Captain Tian, I had to put the book down. Jyn was another bad one, her self harm scene was so random, we have had 0 indication beforehand aside from her brooding a bit and now she is all depressed and cuts herself? So depressed she tried to kill Sai as a kid? . So random.
Alot of the story is really unrealistic, the sheer violence and how much the characters got hurt, even with adrenaline there is no way they could have moved let alone kept figting throughout the story, yes fiction will be unrealistic but this story took it way too far to the point of breaking immersion. The violence happening to begin with was odd, this reads like a solid younger end YA then randomly adds crazy gore out of nowhere, imagine watching Ponyo and Miyazaki inserts the level of violence you see in Princess Mononoke into Ponyo, very jarring. Also Sai caring so muchabout the blue dragon kid, then never even mentioning all the dead kids he had from his 700 lifetimes is SO weird like, fuck dem kids I guess because he didn't have them with his "fated one"? Him losing control was also just cringey, with the red eyes and bloodthirst and "omg Sai stop this, they're dead" please, is this Twilight? At this point, I am just complaining about random scenes that made no sense, of which there are ALOT, so it is better to move into worldbuilding.
It was lackluster. Honestly we know nothing, and when we learn things, it doesn't make sense, such as thesuper tall library, when Sai was looking at all those books on that shelf, the books were so diverse in topic, you'd think a library that large would be much more organized. The environments make no sense, jumping between deserts and mountains and seas, but they travel for 2 days on foot? Everything lacks thought, basically. Even the story of the dragons interluded within the book, though clearly a stylistic choice, came off as lazy.
Lastly, two large complaints, all to do with the last chapter or 2. One, DON'T FEED A NEWBORN HONEY ARE YOU TRYING TO KILL HER? Two, Sai was lowkey a pedo I can't lie,his logic for staying away from Jyn as she grew up wasn't "Gee would it not be weird to see my future lover grow from a baby into a woman, would it not be weird to eventually have sex with someone you knew for their whole life when you were the adult", no, HIS logic was " I want Jyn to have a normal childhood without me because she has been through so much", YOU SHOULD NOT WANNA BE IN YOUR WIFE'S CHILDHOOD EVER IF SHE IS A BABY AND YOU ARE A GROWN 25YO MAN!!!
Anyway, book cover is gorgeous and I've read worse.
The book was mostly fast paced (minus some slog in the middle), especially fast at the end, it could have benefitted from more pages, I really wanted to like this book, in fact, the first 40% was enjoyable, and the book initially sat at 4 stars. The beginning really caught my attention, I loved the idea of Sai being a matchmaker and the opening scene was very well done in my opinion, a great way to open a book, but by the 40% mark the story starts slowly crumbling apart until it becomes a complete mess by the end. Specifically,
I am not sure where to even begin with this book, so I guess I will start with the horrendous prose. I did not notice it in the beginning, the writing seemed fine initially, but the more I read, the more annoying and juvenile it was, the prose is just so crap and I can't put into words why, it is just such poor quality. The dialogue is bad too, it is unnatural for one, but once Sai finds Jyn it gets even worse. I could go on and on about how much I hated Sai's use of petnames, he didn't even pick one pet name, he called Jyn every crappy nickname under the sun and the author always inserted them not only into the most awkward unnatural places, but the sheer quantity of the petnames made me want to put the book down forever.
The petnames are made even worse by the fact that their love feels so half baked and forced to begin with, the worst thing about reading this book was the fact I would read a passage and see what exactly the author was trying to do, convey, set up, and not in a good way, I would read a crappy paragraph and go "I see she is trying to set up Sai to have xyz personality and bring that back later in the book". I should not be able to pick apart a book like that when I am casually reading in bed.
This kind of like transparent writing made it really hard to believe they liked eachother, it was so instalove, which I don't even hate, and it technically makes sense here but it was still hard to read, especially because there was a grumpy sunshine trope shoehorned in, made worse by Jyn's very rough and awkward transition from "Go away Sai" to "I love you". All just so...unbelievable?
The characters were half baked too, all of them but especially the supporting cast. Captain Tian and his relationship to Sai made no sense, Feng was annoying and
Alot of the story is really unrealistic, the sheer violence and how much the characters got hurt, even with adrenaline there is no way they could have moved let alone kept figting throughout the story, yes fiction will be unrealistic but this story took it way too far to the point of breaking immersion. The violence happening to begin with was odd, this reads like a solid younger end YA then randomly adds crazy gore out of nowhere, imagine watching Ponyo and Miyazaki inserts the level of violence you see in Princess Mononoke into Ponyo, very jarring. Also Sai caring so much
It was lackluster. Honestly we know nothing, and when we learn things, it doesn't make sense, such as the
Lastly, two large complaints, all to do with the last chapter or 2. One, DON'T FEED A NEWBORN HONEY ARE YOU TRYING TO KILL HER? Two, Sai was lowkey a pedo I can't lie,
Anyway, book cover is gorgeous and I've read worse.
Content Warnings
Graphic: Gore, Torture, and Murder
Moderate: Panic attacks/disorders, Self harm, and War
Minor: Child death and Sexual content