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Beware of free books! 0.5 stars!
This could quite possibly be the worst book I’ve ever read.
What could have been a great story just missed all the marks. At every opportunity the author could have added some action or drama, she just passed it on with nothingness, easy escapes, a lacklustre failure of a romance, characters with little personality (especially the main), and no climax at all.
I have so many issues with this book and because I’m angry that I wasted several hours of my time reading this garbage, I will list all of them. Hopefully I can persuade some of you to avoid wasting your time on this atrocity.
The plot in this book needs a lot of work! It was 80% over described showering, dressing and eating and 20% actual story. It reads like something a 16 year old wrote for herself thinking that others would like it, but she’s just trying way too hard.
My main complaints with the plot are as follows:
skips in scenes with no explanation.
Bad inside jokes that are never explained,
Strange changes in character behaviour and way of speaking that stand out like a sore thumb
Poorly researched scenes involving a church/ priest
This all makes for an incongruous story that jarred me in just about every chapter or less offensively, just made me confused about which character was involved.
The sheer amount of arm hair standing on end,ears pricking, licking lips, and tinked noises in this made me roll my eyes.
But my biggest complaint about this book is the complete lack of editing. Missing words, misspelled words, slang out of dialogue, words used incorrectly. I was cringing so hard I thought my face would get stuck.
Here’s a few choice quotes that I have selected and commented on as I was reading:
“A gentle knock broken the stillness of the room. The latch clinked, as the handle turned. The pocket door’s track creaked, as the door slid open. Mira popped her head into the room. “Cranapple?” She held a glass of red liquid; ice cubes tinked against the glass.”
The author treats her reader as if they have no common sense. I don’t need to know that cranberry juice is red, i also don’t need to know every single thing the main puts in her overnight bag. It’s useful to let the reader imagine this stuff for themselves. In such a short Novel, i really don’t like this much filler. It really seems like this author is over describing to make her book longer when she should have focused more on making the plot more interesting.
“The hairpins tinked into the pearl shell, a neat little pile forming”
Hairpins do not *tink* into neat piles! If you’re going to over describe, at least think about basic physics!
“I adjusted the watch band on my left wrist before picking the pen up with the same hand. I turned the notebook along the edge of the table; pen poised to write between the blue lines”
I don’t care which hand you use to pick up the pen. Also! Really? The lines were blue and you wrote between them! I’m so glad you told me that I never would have guessed!!
This book insults my intelligence and is just poorly written. Descriptors can be great and if used in the right place, give me a super detailed slow mo action scene and I’ll eat it up! But I don’t need to read 5 paragraphs on the characters making coffee and eating eggs and french toast. Honestly!?!
This could quite possibly be the worst book I’ve ever read.
What could have been a great story just missed all the marks. At every opportunity the author could have added some action or drama, she just passed it on with nothingness, easy escapes, a lacklustre failure of a romance, characters with little personality (especially the main), and no climax at all.
I have so many issues with this book and because I’m angry that I wasted several hours of my time reading this garbage, I will list all of them. Hopefully I can persuade some of you to avoid wasting your time on this atrocity.
The plot in this book needs a lot of work! It was 80% over described showering, dressing and eating and 20% actual story. It reads like something a 16 year old wrote for herself thinking that others would like it, but she’s just trying way too hard.
My main complaints with the plot are as follows:
skips in scenes with no explanation.
Bad inside jokes that are never explained,
Strange changes in character behaviour and way of speaking that stand out like a sore thumb
Poorly researched scenes involving a church/ priest
This all makes for an incongruous story that jarred me in just about every chapter or less offensively, just made me confused about which character was involved.
The sheer amount of arm hair standing on end,ears pricking, licking lips, and tinked noises in this made me roll my eyes.
But my biggest complaint about this book is the complete lack of editing. Missing words, misspelled words, slang out of dialogue, words used incorrectly. I was cringing so hard I thought my face would get stuck.
Here’s a few choice quotes that I have selected and commented on as I was reading:
“A gentle knock broken the stillness of the room. The latch clinked, as the handle turned. The pocket door’s track creaked, as the door slid open. Mira popped her head into the room. “Cranapple?” She held a glass of red liquid; ice cubes tinked against the glass.”
The author treats her reader as if they have no common sense. I don’t need to know that cranberry juice is red, i also don’t need to know every single thing the main puts in her overnight bag. It’s useful to let the reader imagine this stuff for themselves. In such a short Novel, i really don’t like this much filler. It really seems like this author is over describing to make her book longer when she should have focused more on making the plot more interesting.
“The hairpins tinked into the pearl shell, a neat little pile forming”
Hairpins do not *tink* into neat piles! If you’re going to over describe, at least think about basic physics!
“I adjusted the watch band on my left wrist before picking the pen up with the same hand. I turned the notebook along the edge of the table; pen poised to write between the blue lines”
I don’t care which hand you use to pick up the pen. Also! Really? The lines were blue and you wrote between them! I’m so glad you told me that I never would have guessed!!
This book insults my intelligence and is just poorly written. Descriptors can be great and if used in the right place, give me a super detailed slow mo action scene and I’ll eat it up! But I don’t need to read 5 paragraphs on the characters making coffee and eating eggs and french toast. Honestly!?!
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