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zakfar_magni's review
1.0
Idea of the story was good. Execution pretty bad. And surprisingly, there are silly mistakes in the book that we only expect from amateur authors. I've read another book of Anthony Payne, and that was far far better than this.
The story initiated in the worst possible way. Erotic (spanking) scene between random people works in some story, no doubt. But that scene is either to bring a peak of the story early or build some tension early on because the later part would be very very slow for some time. Some authors also use that for some other creativity. But here, we had a scene as if the author did not have an idea how to start this story. So a random scene was brought forth and then the scene was forcefully attached to the main story.
No doubt the author attempted to build the character. But he failed miserably. Even after so much blabbering we literally have no attachment to any of the two main characters. Scenes were also build carelessly. We were told something about the physique of the female character, in a way we grasp very little, and then we're left on to imagine the rest ourselves. Nothing is told about the clothing, as it should be crucial in Erotica. Especially when we're supposed to imagine a different kind of wild west (where female will be dominant). I'm so disappointed. I won't recommend this story to anyone.
The story initiated in the worst possible way. Erotic (spanking) scene between random people works in some story, no doubt. But that scene is either to bring a peak of the story early or build some tension early on because the later part would be very very slow for some time. Some authors also use that for some other creativity. But here, we had a scene as if the author did not have an idea how to start this story. So a random scene was brought forth and then the scene was forcefully attached to the main story.
No doubt the author attempted to build the character. But he failed miserably. Even after so much blabbering we literally have no attachment to any of the two main characters. Scenes were also build carelessly. We were told something about the physique of the female character, in a way we grasp very little, and then we're left on to imagine the rest ourselves. Nothing is told about the clothing, as it should be crucial in Erotica. Especially when we're supposed to imagine a different kind of wild west (where female will be dominant). I'm so disappointed. I won't recommend this story to anyone.
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