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brucelee1255's review against another edition
1.0
Zane, I can't believe I wasted time with this book. Here's why it's terrible and you should feel embarrassed:
1) Hey, Zane, I've got a tip for you. This is not a real sentence, and it is copied verbatim:
"That worthy ejaculated, 'Lord!'"
Get an editor.
2) Here's another sentence that is terrible and representative of the book as a whole:
"'I reckon not,' rejoined Tanner, gloomily, yet he thrilled in his gloom."
Good God, Zane. I don't even know where to start. First of all, why can't anyone ever just say something? Why do they always have to rejoin it or ejaculate it or drawl it? Doesn't anyone just talk in your world?
Next, adverbs are the bastard children of grammar. If you're using too many adverbs, it's because you're not using your dialogue right. I should know that someone is saying something gloomily because of the goddamn context.
Finally, what in the hell does "he thrilled in his gloom" even mean? He was happy to be gloomy? He enjoyed the gloom? He had a nervous tremor? If it's the last option, which I think you meant it to be, why do you say "yet," like "in spite of himself, he was nervous"? You make me sick.
3) Look, I understand that 1930 was a different time. I get that. But Zane, you edit out all the curse words with lines but leave the N-word in. Not only that, but you use it as punctuation on the worst insults. Take this quote from a Southern belle talking about her awful husband:
"A beast who paws me - tears my clothes off! Beats me! A dog! A n----r!"
Jesus Christ, Zane. Just... Jesus Christ.
4) You introduce piles of characters, spend a long time in the beginning setting up every last person, then abandon them all right afterwards. Then you introduce another pile of characters, then you get bored with them too and move on. You're like a spoiled child with too many toys. Just pick some characters and make them interesting.
5) How did Arizona Ames get so good at shooting? We're introduced to this guy, and he's just a normal guy. We don't even spend any time with him for the first 20 pages of your frigging book. Then he's introduced, then he kills a room full of people including a sheriff after about 60 pages out of nowhere? After that he's the fastest gun in the West? It's like... you don't understand how to create characters. Do you? Do you really?
In conclusion, I can't believe people made you rich by reading your worthless tripe. You owe me for the time I wasted reading your book.
And once again... seriously? "Ejaculated?" Didn't that mean anything else in the 30's? Were there no medical textbooks? God.
1) Hey, Zane, I've got a tip for you. This is not a real sentence, and it is copied verbatim:
"That worthy ejaculated, 'Lord!'"
Get an editor.
2) Here's another sentence that is terrible and representative of the book as a whole:
"'I reckon not,' rejoined Tanner, gloomily, yet he thrilled in his gloom."
Good God, Zane. I don't even know where to start. First of all, why can't anyone ever just say something? Why do they always have to rejoin it or ejaculate it or drawl it? Doesn't anyone just talk in your world?
Next, adverbs are the bastard children of grammar. If you're using too many adverbs, it's because you're not using your dialogue right. I should know that someone is saying something gloomily because of the goddamn context.
Finally, what in the hell does "he thrilled in his gloom" even mean? He was happy to be gloomy? He enjoyed the gloom? He had a nervous tremor? If it's the last option, which I think you meant it to be, why do you say "yet," like "in spite of himself, he was nervous"? You make me sick.
3) Look, I understand that 1930 was a different time. I get that. But Zane, you edit out all the curse words with lines but leave the N-word in. Not only that, but you use it as punctuation on the worst insults. Take this quote from a Southern belle talking about her awful husband:
"A beast who paws me - tears my clothes off! Beats me! A dog! A n----r!"
Jesus Christ, Zane. Just... Jesus Christ.
4) You introduce piles of characters, spend a long time in the beginning setting up every last person, then abandon them all right afterwards. Then you introduce another pile of characters, then you get bored with them too and move on. You're like a spoiled child with too many toys. Just pick some characters and make them interesting.
5) How did Arizona Ames get so good at shooting? We're introduced to this guy, and he's just a normal guy. We don't even spend any time with him for the first 20 pages of your frigging book. Then he's introduced, then he kills a room full of people including a sheriff after about 60 pages out of nowhere? After that he's the fastest gun in the West? It's like... you don't understand how to create characters. Do you? Do you really?
In conclusion, I can't believe people made you rich by reading your worthless tripe. You owe me for the time I wasted reading your book.
And once again... seriously? "Ejaculated?" Didn't that mean anything else in the 30's? Were there no medical textbooks? God.
captivate406's review against another edition
4.0
I absolutely loved this book! I read it as a blind date with a book and it wasn’t something I would normally pick but I loved the story. The language was difficult to get past at first but other than the plot was well developed and the characters completely original!
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