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A review by hexentart
Alpha Ranger by Anna Fury
adventurous
dark
emotional
hopeful
lighthearted
fast-paced
- Plot- or character-driven? Character
- Strong character development? No
- Loveable characters? It's complicated
- Diverse cast of characters? No
- Flaws of characters a main focus? No
3.0
This short story set in the Alpha Compound universe was a fun and spicy PWP.
However, I had to detract a star for a glaring continuity error.
The MMC removes the FMC's shirt, remarking on her bra and the way her breasts look filling it out. A few paragraphs later and it said he came all over the bottom of her shirt and he had to help her take it off, and wondered if she was wearing undergarments.
The fact that this is a short story, PWP, only 45 pages long and that mistake made it through the chain of command to be published for sale is a big OOF. It throws the reader completely out of the moment.
This short is not indicative of the quality of the author's other works, so take it with a grain of salt.
However, I had to detract a star for a glaring continuity error.
The MMC removes the FMC's shirt, remarking on her bra and the way her breasts look filling it out. A few paragraphs later and it said he came all over the bottom of her shirt and he had to help her take it off, and wondered if she was wearing undergarments.
The fact that this is a short story, PWP, only 45 pages long and that mistake made it through the chain of command to be published for sale is a big OOF. It throws the reader completely out of the moment.
This short is not indicative of the quality of the author's other works, so take it with a grain of salt.