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smokingchagga 's review for:
Stones To Abbigale
by Onision
Plot or Character Driven:
N/A
Strong character development:
No
Loveable characters:
No
Diverse cast of characters:
No
It was a shitty book by a piece of shit human. I decided to count how many adverbs the story had. Fucking 971, although I might have missed some. The grammar was also atrocious. I don't want to rip apart the story too much since Strange Aeons did that already (watch her video on the book: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=7XcwsFvOOaA&t=544s)
Here are some of the weirdest sentences in the book (I copied them straight out the text with NO changes to the grammar):
'He rapidly stepped towards her.'
'I smiled and replied "Makeup is just makeup, skin is just skin. It is what it is."'
'I want to hear everything you have to say. I want to find a way to heal the damage done until you can forget it ever existed.'
I find that problematic. Getting into a romantic relationship is not going to heal up traumatic experiences and take away mental illness. I hate everything about that aspect of the book. If you feel like you're all alone with your problems, get professional help. Sure, the love and support of your family and friends is important, but it's not a substitute for seeking treatment.
'My mom inquired, "So how's your life going James?" I replied "Fine." Rick asked, "Got a girlfriend?" I didn't respond.'
This grammar and dialogue make me want to cry.
'She had become the center of my world and I felt like I was finally really finally enjoying my life.'
I can't say I'm too surprised to see all these grammar mistakes since the book was self-published.
Also, if a relationship is the only thing that makes you feel good about yourself, seek professional help. It is not healthy for your life to revolve solely around another person.
'Everyone silently sat at the table awkwardly pushing around their food as I gathered my things.'
'Davis could see my upset posture out his window as the bus pulled up so I walked up the steps this time he screamed, "I love you so much! I wished you were my boyfriend!"'
'She giggled excitedly and immediately jumped on me while simultaneously wrapping her legs around me happilly kissing every part of my face but my lips.'
'The president walked over to Chris, pulling his own pants slightly back so he could crouch.'
'Naturally Abbi was on my team and we played against a couple of people who were equally unenthusiastic about the sport so we basically just stood around talking about how dorky our uniforms were and basically anything we could keep our minds preoccupied.'
'It also made me feel good about myself, as my mom and Abbi would compliment how strong they thought I was every time I walked out with something heavy.'
(Context: they were making out in their bed)'I firmly grabbed her waist and slid my hips slowly up her now soaking legs.' WHY WERE HER LEGS SOAKING??
All in all, I hate how this book romanticised abuse and mental illness as cute. It also used school shootings and abusive parents as drama bonding. The book felt like the first draft of a saviour fantasy fanfiction.
(No offence to anyone who genuinely liked it)
Here are some of the weirdest sentences in the book (I copied them straight out the text with NO changes to the grammar):
'He rapidly stepped towards her.'
'I smiled and replied "Makeup is just makeup, skin is just skin. It is what it is."'
'I want to hear everything you have to say. I want to find a way to heal the damage done until you can forget it ever existed.'
I find that problematic. Getting into a romantic relationship is not going to heal up traumatic experiences and take away mental illness. I hate everything about that aspect of the book. If you feel like you're all alone with your problems, get professional help. Sure, the love and support of your family and friends is important, but it's not a substitute for seeking treatment.
'My mom inquired, "So how's your life going James?" I replied "Fine." Rick asked, "Got a girlfriend?" I didn't respond.'
This grammar and dialogue make me want to cry.
'She had become the center of my world and I felt like I was finally really finally enjoying my life.'
I can't say I'm too surprised to see all these grammar mistakes since the book was self-published.
Also, if a relationship is the only thing that makes you feel good about yourself, seek professional help. It is not healthy for your life to revolve solely around another person.
'Everyone silently sat at the table awkwardly pushing around their food as I gathered my things.'
'Davis could see my upset posture out his window as the bus pulled up so I walked up the steps this time he screamed, "I love you so much! I wished you were my boyfriend!"'
'She giggled excitedly and immediately jumped on me while simultaneously wrapping her legs around me happilly kissing every part of my face but my lips.'
'The president walked over to Chris, pulling his own pants slightly back so he could crouch.'
'Naturally Abbi was on my team and we played against a couple of people who were equally unenthusiastic about the sport so we basically just stood around talking about how dorky our uniforms were and basically anything we could keep our minds preoccupied.'
'It also made me feel good about myself, as my mom and Abbi would compliment how strong they thought I was every time I walked out with something heavy.'
(Context: they were making out in their bed)'I firmly grabbed her waist and slid my hips slowly up her now soaking legs.' WHY WERE HER LEGS SOAKING??
All in all, I hate how this book romanticised abuse and mental illness as cute. It also used school shootings and abusive parents as drama bonding. The book felt like the first draft of a saviour fantasy fanfiction.
(No offence to anyone who genuinely liked it)