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A review by emiemzy
The Basement by Chad P. Brown
2.0
I'll be honest and say that I read this book by accident. I was, in fact, looking for a book of the same name that a friend had recommended to me (which I still haven't found) and innocently downloaded the free book before setting to work reading my way through the meaty 13 pages. My disappoint has probably been increased by the fact that this was not what I was looking for but I'm not sure I have much to say about it.
A lot of it was cheesy, a lot of it made my face crumple in discomfort and other lines just made me cringe like hell. I mean, there were lines like:
And I think it was those cheesy lines that brought the short story down. A little more language use and we'd be onto something.
The storyline could have also been thickened out a little bit. I mean obviously, it's a short story, but it doesn't excuse rushing through everything like you are being chased by your mother's ghost does it? There needed more tension building and I think that thickening out the first part of the story would have aided this perfectly.
A lot of it was cheesy, a lot of it made my face crumple in discomfort and other lines just made me cringe like hell. I mean, there were lines like:
"Heather thought for the second time how she'd fucked by coming into this house"
And I think it was those cheesy lines that brought the short story down. A little more language use and we'd be onto something.
The storyline could have also been thickened out a little bit. I mean obviously, it's a short story, but it doesn't excuse rushing through everything like you are being chased by your mother's ghost does it? There needed more tension building and I think that thickening out the first part of the story would have aided this perfectly.