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ris0417 's review for:
The Holly Dates
by Brittainy C. Cherry
2 ⭐️ I’m a little surprised at the high reviews… I liked the storyline, the banter dialogue was good and the spice was spicin’ but the writing surrounding it all seemed amateur. The author repeats things constantly, I guess for emphasis? But they do it so much it doesn’t seem natural, and often end a sentence and began the next with the same word- just a couple examples: “… emo music. Emo music…” “Michael? Michael.” In the second chapter they wrote “one thousand dollars worth of booze” three times. It just kept taking me out of the story because it felt clunky.
Some things didn’t make sense either… why would this “thousand dollars worth of booze” be delivered to his apartment, instead of his restaurant? How did the restaurant have good reviews when it wasn’t open yet? If he was holding her against the wall how did his hands also rub her back? Hovering over her but also able to take her shirt off? The first night together his snoring was so bad she slept somewhere else, but every other night together was fine?
Some things didn’t make sense either… why would this “thousand dollars worth of booze” be delivered to his apartment, instead of his restaurant? How did the restaurant have good reviews when it wasn’t open yet? If he was holding her against the wall how did his hands also rub her back? Hovering over her but also able to take her shirt off? The first night together his snoring was so bad she slept somewhere else, but every other night together was fine?