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A review by readclever
Vulnerable AF by Tarriona Ball
3.0
I wanted to like this poetry because vulnerability speaks to my soul. There are poems, like "The Cycle," that are very real and authentic. It wasn't a repeated lament. Instead a deeper look into a hard breakup is easier to understand for those that have lost their heart and had it shattered.
And there are terrific lines that encompass the desire to be a good partner. One line that stood out was in "Tiny Desk," where the narrator talks about what she thought she offering, feeding for the soul. "I started to believe I would be good for him/I wasn't candy, I wasn't pork; I was greens and fish/I would be good for him."
In general, the poems read more like a journal entry. "Adam," the final one, felt too long and unedited. Too many times that the narrator discusses how bad the ex-boyfriend. I wanted to read about the healing, the way she moved on from his betrayal and dismissiveness.
Low three stars.
Talent was there and the emotional impact could work. Just needed more editing and tightening of theme. Maybe retool some of the poems to be a dual perspective, past and present. Not a bad first poetry book.
And there are terrific lines that encompass the desire to be a good partner. One line that stood out was in "Tiny Desk," where the narrator talks about what she thought she offering, feeding for the soul. "I started to believe I would be good for him/I wasn't candy, I wasn't pork; I was greens and fish/I would be good for him."
In general, the poems read more like a journal entry. "Adam," the final one, felt too long and unedited. Too many times that the narrator discusses how bad the ex-boyfriend. I wanted to read about the healing, the way she moved on from his betrayal and dismissiveness.
Low three stars.
Talent was there and the emotional impact could work. Just needed more editing and tightening of theme. Maybe retool some of the poems to be a dual perspective, past and present. Not a bad first poetry book.