A review by offmyredcarpet
Moonlight Awakening by Saam King

slow-paced

2.5

Extremely disappointed in this installment. It‘s hurriedly written and reads more like a first draft. Poor pacing. Ineffectual and indecisive FMC. The reason for not disclosing who/what they are to the FMC was weak. But what irked me the most were the continuity and transition errors. For instance, FMC is lying on bed one moment then standing in the MMCs arms the next and being walked backward to the mattress she was *just* lying on the paragraph before—there were quite a few mistakes like this. It’s also too long for the story being told. There isn’t much substance and would likely read tighter if it was edited down.