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A review by suleika
Intraterrestrial by Nicholas Conley
3.0
Ecopy provided by the author in exchange for an honest review.
Although it is a very interesting story unfortunately it didn’t quite work for me. The biggest issue being the dialogue. The characters to me were not likable because of how they talked and communicated with others, for example Adam’s mom with her foul language and the way she talked to the principal of Adam’s school, no mom would do that. I am a mom so I understand some of it but it was not handled appropriately. Also the way she talked to the Dr wasn’t appropriate, no adult talks like that to another.
Also the story seemed for a very young audience but I wouldn’t actually give it to children to read because of the bad language used on the story. If the story is targeted to an adult audience then it needs to be changed a little to make it more interesting.
To be honest if the dialogue would get a bit polished the story would be great since the plot is quite interesting.
Although it is a very interesting story unfortunately it didn’t quite work for me. The biggest issue being the dialogue. The characters to me were not likable because of how they talked and communicated with others, for example Adam’s mom with her foul language and the way she talked to the principal of Adam’s school, no mom would do that. I am a mom so I understand some of it but it was not handled appropriately. Also the way she talked to the Dr wasn’t appropriate, no adult talks like that to another.
Also the story seemed for a very young audience but I wouldn’t actually give it to children to read because of the bad language used on the story. If the story is targeted to an adult audience then it needs to be changed a little to make it more interesting.
To be honest if the dialogue would get a bit polished the story would be great since the plot is quite interesting.