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A review by sweetvireo
Black in White by JC Andrijeski
3.0
2.5/5
I like the premise of the story (the clairaudience part) and the broad story itself, although it was predictable about a third of the way in.
Also, if Ian was whatever Black is and since Black has a different looking penis, why didn't Ian or why didn't Miri notice?
The writing style feels off to me. I think it is too many complex sentences (dependent, independent clause). Too many "meaning"s. I don't feel that the dialogue is true to how people actually talk. It felt fake. Too many pauses and not enough answers. It left me feeling frustrated with the author.
I like the premise of the story (the clairaudience part) and the broad story itself
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(but I hated the "alien thing". You can definitely do an interesting clairvoyance story without bringing in inter-dimensional beings.)Spoiler
That sex scene was unnecessary. It took the flow and ground it to a screeching halt. I understand why something like this occurred to advance the plot, but I feel like the same could have been accomplished another way. Like, seriously, find your killer who is hunting the both of you down before you have sexy time. Additionally, the description of his penis was totally unwarranted. A lot of the text in this scene left me saying WTF and even laughing at times. I really don't think that was the intention of the author.Also, if Ian was whatever Black is and since Black has a different looking penis, why didn't Ian or why didn't Miri notice?
The writing style feels off to me. I think it is too many complex sentences (dependent, independent clause). Too many "meaning"s. I don't feel that the dialogue is true to how people actually talk. It felt fake. Too many pauses and not enough answers. It left me feeling frustrated with the author.