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A review by domid73
Knee Deep In Da Game : Show No Love by Hope Phillips, Hope Phillips
2.0
needs some more detail
I believe the story has a lot of promise but it does jump a lot of time with no real final to what was read before it skips. We just 5 years then 10 years but there is a scene where Harmony confronts the crackhead from 15 years ago but she refers to her child still as a little boy.
There are also a lot of grammatical errors that make the story hard to read especially within the last 20 pages. Then the story ends abruptly and doesn’t seem like it should. Overall I believe it needed more detail to really tell the story.
I believe the story has a lot of promise but it does jump a lot of time with no real final to what was read before it skips. We just 5 years then 10 years but there is a scene where Harmony confronts the crackhead from 15 years ago but she refers to her child still as a little boy.
There are also a lot of grammatical errors that make the story hard to read especially within the last 20 pages. Then the story ends abruptly and doesn’t seem like it should. Overall I believe it needed more detail to really tell the story.