A review by kmcquage
Dead Things by Stephen Blackmoore

2.0

I wanted to like this more, but there were some serious editing issues, leading to some structural problems and very odd sentences. When my narrator completely loses control of his grammar for a paragraph here or there (and not in a way that resembles how anyone anywhere actually talks), it's extremely distracting.

I also didn't find the characters' irrationality convincing. I had the vague sense that it was fueled by past interactions, but the internal logic didn't quite hold up.