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A review by erin_escapes_reality
The Third Baseman by Lulu Moore
3.0
I want to start by saying the story is on point for a good romance novel. Everything you need is there and it's an original story, at least for me. I would recommend this book to anyone who loves romance novels.
So why only 3 stars? The book just needs some polishing. I read that Moore was a self published author at first, but I didn't look into if this book was also self published. If it is, that would explain some things. There are a multitude of editing errors. This didn't take away from the story, but it was distracting at times. It was simple things like a word missing an 's' at the end or saying something the same way just sentences apart.
Another editing downfall, which I at least think would fall under editing, is just the fleshing out of the story. Some of it felt "clunky", especially some of the relationship interaction. I got what Moore was getting across, but I don't think it came off well. At times I found Jupiter to be a jerk who needed to get it together. But I don't think that's what Moore was going for, it's just she needed to flesh the conversation and relationship out a little better.
Last, I scoured the internet to try to find if Moore is American because some of the terms and descriptions were odd. I'm fine if she's not American, but you are writing about American baseball. In this vein, I wondered at the reality of their high school. Is that how schools are in California? Maybe I just have no clue, but that was my first tip off at wondering if she was from Europe or Canada. It was here too some of the terms came about when she used the word "squad" for "team" and "pitch" for "field". Maybe other places is America use those terms, but I had never heard it before.
All in all, and enjoyable book. Deal Lulu Moore, hit me up with an Arc if you need editing ideas, I'm not a professional but I won't charge haha!
So why only 3 stars? The book just needs some polishing. I read that Moore was a self published author at first, but I didn't look into if this book was also self published. If it is, that would explain some things. There are a multitude of editing errors. This didn't take away from the story, but it was distracting at times. It was simple things like a word missing an 's' at the end or saying something the same way just sentences apart.
Another editing downfall, which I at least think would fall under editing, is just the fleshing out of the story. Some of it felt "clunky", especially some of the relationship interaction. I got what Moore was getting across, but I don't think it came off well. At times I found Jupiter to be a jerk who needed to get it together. But I don't think that's what Moore was going for, it's just she needed to flesh the conversation and relationship out a little better.
Last, I scoured the internet to try to find if Moore is American because some of the terms and descriptions were odd. I'm fine if she's not American, but you are writing about American baseball. In this vein, I wondered at the reality of their high school. Is that how schools are in California? Maybe I just have no clue, but that was my first tip off at wondering if she was from Europe or Canada. It was here too some of the terms came about when she used the word "squad" for "team" and "pitch" for "field". Maybe other places is America use those terms, but I had never heard it before.
All in all, and enjoyable book. Deal Lulu Moore, hit me up with an Arc if you need editing ideas, I'm not a professional but I won't charge haha!