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Apple in the Middle
by Dawn Quigley
Read for Librarian Book Group
Reasons this book needs a copyeditor:
*Grandfather served in WWII
*Grandfather is in his 60s
*The book is set in approximately 2002
*This makes Grandpa about two years old when serving in WWII
*Mom graduated high school in 1988
*Mom had Lief Garrett posters in her room
*Leif Garret was not popular in the 70s, not the 80s
*Mom was born in 1968
*This makes mom 20 when she graduated high school even though she was "very smart"
*House depicted as being on a long, gravel road
*House has alley behind it with another house on the other side of the alley. This doesn't fit any framework I've experienced when getting to a house on a long, graveled road.
In matters of style, the voice of this character felt like a 10–12-year-old, not someone in high school.
A lot of the writing is very conversational—many parenthetical asides and talking to the reader. This makes the book feel very unsophisticated and increased my dislike which is too bad, because I'm interested in the story's framework of a girl who had not been exposed to her Native American heritage.
Also, her grandparents dialog was great, but got lost by Apple's chatter.
I'm glad the North Dakota State University Press is recognizing contemporary indigenous voices. It would also be good if they employed some basic publishing standards such as a thorough copyedit, and possibly a better developmental and line edit.
Reasons this book needs a copyeditor:
*Grandfather served in WWII
*Grandfather is in his 60s
*The book is set in approximately 2002
*This makes Grandpa about two years old when serving in WWII
*Mom graduated high school in 1988
*Mom had Lief Garrett posters in her room
*Leif Garret was not popular in the 70s, not the 80s
*Mom was born in 1968
*This makes mom 20 when she graduated high school even though she was "very smart"
*House depicted as being on a long, gravel road
*House has alley behind it with another house on the other side of the alley. This doesn't fit any framework I've experienced when getting to a house on a long, graveled road.
In matters of style, the voice of this character felt like a 10–12-year-old, not someone in high school.
A lot of the writing is very conversational—many parenthetical asides and talking to the reader. This makes the book feel very unsophisticated and increased my dislike which is too bad, because I'm interested in the story's framework of a girl who had not been exposed to her Native American heritage.
Also, her grandparents dialog was great, but got lost by Apple's chatter.
I'm glad the North Dakota State University Press is recognizing contemporary indigenous voices. It would also be good if they employed some basic publishing standards such as a thorough copyedit, and possibly a better developmental and line edit.