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A review by jscarpa14
Flirty by J.B. Heller
3.0
Needed a bit more
So first I'd like to note I was a bit confused, the author uses UK English with terms like lift and crisps, which is fine, but then she starts talking about states and I'm not aware of any country besides the US that has those. Please correct if I'm wrong on that, but if I'm not I feel like as a writer you have to make a choice, basically it's the equivalent of writing the Queen of England and having her eat chips and take the elevator. It just doesn't fit. Lifts in the US are something people put in their shoes to look taller. I'm not exactly sure how they work because I've accepted my plight in life as the short person, but that's how the term is used here. Anyway point being unless you've made a point that your character is from somewhere else than the setting they need to use the dialect appropriate for that setting.
Next we've got the secondary characters, all of whom are one dimensional, there's the snarky and sweet best friends, the beautiful but mean sister and the belittling enabling mother, the sixteen year old son that's too sexed up and the gay assistant. There were a couple more so vague they don't have a descriptor, but the characters I just named are nothing beyond the descriptions I've offered here. There's no depth to any of them.
Finally there's really no conflict in this book, everything that might be conflict is resolved in a page or two with no real difficulty to it. Conflict is what makes a book impressive and page turning and this story doesn't have it, I mean its even got a virgin heroine, so there's no background to build from either.
It's a cute story, but I can't say much more for it.
So first I'd like to note I was a bit confused, the author uses UK English with terms like lift and crisps, which is fine, but then she starts talking about states and I'm not aware of any country besides the US that has those. Please correct if I'm wrong on that, but if I'm not I feel like as a writer you have to make a choice, basically it's the equivalent of writing the Queen of England and having her eat chips and take the elevator. It just doesn't fit. Lifts in the US are something people put in their shoes to look taller. I'm not exactly sure how they work because I've accepted my plight in life as the short person, but that's how the term is used here. Anyway point being unless you've made a point that your character is from somewhere else than the setting they need to use the dialect appropriate for that setting.
Next we've got the secondary characters, all of whom are one dimensional, there's the snarky and sweet best friends, the beautiful but mean sister and the belittling enabling mother, the sixteen year old son that's too sexed up and the gay assistant. There were a couple more so vague they don't have a descriptor, but the characters I just named are nothing beyond the descriptions I've offered here. There's no depth to any of them.
Finally there's really no conflict in this book, everything that might be conflict is resolved in a page or two with no real difficulty to it. Conflict is what makes a book impressive and page turning and this story doesn't have it, I mean its even got a virgin heroine, so there's no background to build from either.
It's a cute story, but I can't say much more for it.