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allthebooksaremine 's review for:
A Legend in the Baking
by Jamie Wesley
lighthearted
medium-paced
Plot or Character Driven:
A mix
Strong character development:
No
Loveable characters:
No
Diverse cast of characters:
No
Flaws of characters a main focus:
Yes
Is this a ghostwriter?? The first book was much better. The story was good, I just didn’t like the writing style. It comes off as elementary and a little corny at times. Almost like she’s trying too hard to be rom-comy.
The character development for Sloane isn’t great. 17 year old Sloane and 29 year old Sloane think and act exactly the same. The inner monologue was grating. It was fine in the “past” chapters but the “present” ones just made her sound ridiculous.
Some paragraphs are awkward, some words are used incorrectly and some lines are thrown in but don’t land because of bad flow. Overall, the story is stilted and written in a way that forces a narrative. It just doesn’t come across as natural. And sorry but what does MOTY even mean? It’s just randomly used with no explanation. Why isn’t it explained??? Did I miss something?
I really did like the concept of the story. Just not how it was told. The audio book made it a bit better but that had more to do with the narrator than the writer. I mostly read this, so have reviewed from that perspective.
I think this book needed a better editor and perhaps would have worked better in 1st person. Maybe I’ll try this author again in a few years to see if her voice has improved. Great concepts, but her writing just doesn’t grip me.