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A review by acose5
Until Trevor by Aurora Rose Reynolds
2.0
1,5 stars
It took me ages to finish Until Trevor - AGES!
Why? Because I didn't particularly like it.
1: spelling & grammar mistakes - everywhere!
2: The flow was off. The storytelling switches oddly between past & present, not only in flashbacks, but also in terms of tenses. While you're reading in past tense in one sentence, the author switches to present tense in the next and back again. This makes for an odd reading experience.
3: Only the sex scenes are narrated somewhat more detailed. The rest of the action or the background story of the characters is told in paragraphs of max. ten sentences. Thus making it really tough for the reader to relate to the characters OR the story.
Just one scene to show you my point: At about 87% the heroine Liz gets kidnapped - KIDNAPPED, ok? This is how the reader gets told this bit of the story ...
A scene narrated right after ending the chapter of the heroine's honeymoon. Seriously? I mean SERIOUSLY???
Author and editor thought it best to leave out all the interesting story parts - telling their readers what happens only when really, really necessary and in just the shortest way possible.
The cuts in the story are just too harsh and happen too often. Plus: There are so many bad mistakes that could have been avoided with some decent editing. Small things like that:
Liz and Kara are being kept in a tornado shelter; they decide to turn off their electric lamp to save batteries for when they need it again. THEY SIT THERE IN THE DARK - so far, so good. But on the very next page, you get this:
WHAT? No, no, no, just NO!
Mrs. Reynolds, please change editor!!! You have potential and you already proofed to write good and funny books. But your editor needs to improve drastically!
5: Trevor is supposed to be the sexy caveman in this romance. He was not only this, at some stages he was worse than a Neanderthal. At one point I thought "no no, this one is no caveman. He is still an ape that even lacks the ability of speech." In the beginning he acted like a three year old and spoke like one. No sentence longer than 10 words. MAX. The character got more interesting at the end.
It was nearly impossible to like him.
6: Liz's and Trevor's getting together was just without magic or any kind of suspense curve. Not only because of Mr. Caveman, but also because of all aforementioned reasons. So - No nice relationship development between the two - just snarling command after command from him and lots of carrying her around. Meh! Ma che ca**o!
7: I was honestly disappointed as I really liked the first book of the series ([b:Until November|18341046|Until November (Until, #1)|Aurora Rose Reynolds|https://d.gr-assets.com/books/1376867667s/18341046.jpg|25808543]). Why this downslide? It's really strange. At least it doesn't happen very often that the sequels are so much worse than the first novel. Even less often that I get so disappointed and bored while reading =)!
Dear Mrs. [a:Aurora Rose Reynolds|7215619|Aurora Rose Reynolds|https://d.gr-assets.com/authors/1389296409p2/7215619.jpg] - where was your editor?
I'm out in search of a good book.
And no. No recommendation as long as they don't correct some of the editing cruelties made here.
Yours, Anto5
It took me ages to finish Until Trevor - AGES!
Why? Because I didn't particularly like it.
1: spelling & grammar mistakes - everywhere!
2: The flow was off. The storytelling switches oddly between past & present, not only in flashbacks, but also in terms of tenses. While you're reading in past tense in one sentence, the author switches to present tense in the next and back again. This makes for an odd reading experience.
3: Only the sex scenes are narrated somewhat more detailed. The rest of the action or the background story of the characters is told in paragraphs of max. ten sentences. Thus making it really tough for the reader to relate to the characters OR the story.
Just one scene to show you my point: At about 87% the heroine Liz gets kidnapped - KIDNAPPED, ok? This is how the reader gets told this bit of the story ...
“"Liz.” I can hear my name being called, and I know the voice, but don’t know why Kara would be calling my name when I’m on my honeymoon with Trevor. “Hmm?” I answer from my groggy state. “Liz.” I try to lift my head, but become dizzy from the sharp pain that slices through my head. Then I remember that today is my first day back at work. I was there with Kara when two guys came into the store and forced us at gunpoint out to their van. When I tried to prevent them from taking Kara, something slammed into the back of my head.““
A scene narrated right after ending the chapter of the heroine's honeymoon. Seriously? I mean SERIOUSLY???
Author and editor thought it best to leave out all the interesting story parts - telling their readers what happens only when really, really necessary and in just the shortest way possible.
The cuts in the story are just too harsh and happen too often. Plus: There are so many bad mistakes that could have been avoided with some decent editing. Small things like that:
Liz and Kara are being kept in a tornado shelter; they decide to turn off their electric lamp to save batteries for when they need it again. THEY SIT THERE IN THE DARK - so far, so good. But on the very next page, you get this:
"“Kara, I want you to go into the corner, tuck yourself into a ball, and turn off the lamp.” ...Once I see that she is tucked away and turns off the light, ..."
WHAT? No, no, no, just NO!
Mrs. Reynolds, please change editor!!! You have potential and you already proofed to write good and funny books. But your editor needs to improve drastically!
5: Trevor is supposed to be the sexy caveman in this romance. He was not only this, at some stages he was worse than a Neanderthal. At one point I thought "no no, this one is no caveman. He is still an ape that even lacks the ability of speech." In the beginning he acted like a three year old and spoke like one. No sentence longer than 10 words. MAX. The character got more interesting at the end.
It was nearly impossible to like him.
6: Liz's and Trevor's getting together was just without magic or any kind of suspense curve. Not only because of Mr. Caveman, but also because of all aforementioned reasons. So - No nice relationship development between the two - just snarling command after command from him and lots of carrying her around. Meh! Ma che ca**o!
7: I was honestly disappointed as I really liked the first book of the series ([b:Until November|18341046|Until November (Until, #1)|Aurora Rose Reynolds|https://d.gr-assets.com/books/1376867667s/18341046.jpg|25808543]). Why this downslide? It's really strange. At least it doesn't happen very often that the sequels are so much worse than the first novel. Even less often that I get so disappointed and bored while reading =)!
Dear Mrs. [a:Aurora Rose Reynolds|7215619|Aurora Rose Reynolds|https://d.gr-assets.com/authors/1389296409p2/7215619.jpg] - where was your editor?
I'm out in search of a good book.
And no. No recommendation as long as they don't correct some of the editing cruelties made here.
Yours, Anto5