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The Captive Merman's Promise
by Zoey Castile
This was... not good. I realized this very early, but I persisted for three reasons: (1) I paid money into the kickstarter, (2) I almost never give up on books and this one was short, and (3) I hoped it would improve.
It did not.
The beginning happened far too quickly. This is the shortest of the novellas, and for what? Poor pages were needed. I was never given the time or reason to care about either Amada or Rónán. No chemistry in my opinion.
This was full of spelling and grammar errors. So full, I'm determined that literally nobody edited it. Not even the other authors. Ffs, for the next kickstarter, I will edit FOR FREE to avoid this mess of errors.
Also, this ticked a lot of boxes for words that should not be in sex scenes. Number one was "rump". Was it only used twice? Yes, but that's word that'll take anybody out of it. Also tired of referring to a woman's vagina as "her entrance". Phallus, likewise, not a sexy word. And don't get me started on the constant description of Rónán's "pearlescent come".
So why am I even giving this a second star? Literally because of Ammon (the Grand Warlock). At the very least he was a good villain, what with his clear backstory and motives. There was potential in this, but it read like the author just didn't want to put the effort in to reach it.
Zoey Castile, if you read this, please know I would love if you gave another shot at this. Edit it further, I would help. For free. My perfectionist ass would fix every spelling or grammar mistake. This could be so good, but it needs a lot of work.
Thankfully, I've heard this is the worst of the novellas, though that's got to be a low, low bar.
So, there. A generous two stars. I give one star to books I give up on entirely.
Peculiar Tastes:
The Death God's Sacrifice - 4 ⭐️
The Demon's Bargain - 3.75 ⭐️
The Hellmouth Guardian's Lover - 3 ⭐️
The Captive Merman's Promise - 2 ⭐️
It did not.
The beginning happened far too quickly. This is the shortest of the novellas, and for what? Poor pages were needed. I was never given the time or reason to care about either Amada or Rónán. No chemistry in my opinion.
This was full of spelling and grammar errors. So full, I'm determined that literally nobody edited it. Not even the other authors. Ffs, for the next kickstarter, I will edit FOR FREE to avoid this mess of errors.
Also, this ticked a lot of boxes for words that should not be in sex scenes. Number one was "rump". Was it only used twice? Yes, but that's word that'll take anybody out of it. Also tired of referring to a woman's vagina as "her entrance". Phallus, likewise, not a sexy word. And don't get me started on the constant description of Rónán's "pearlescent come".
So why am I even giving this a second star? Literally because of Ammon (the Grand Warlock). At the very least he was a good villain, what with his clear backstory and motives. There was potential in this, but it read like the author just didn't want to put the effort in to reach it.
Zoey Castile, if you read this, please know I would love if you gave another shot at this. Edit it further, I would help. For free. My perfectionist ass would fix every spelling or grammar mistake. This could be so good, but it needs a lot of work.
Thankfully, I've heard this is the worst of the novellas, though that's got to be a low, low bar.
So, there. A generous two stars. I give one star to books I give up on entirely.
Peculiar Tastes:
The Death God's Sacrifice - 4 ⭐️
The Demon's Bargain - 3.75 ⭐️
The Hellmouth Guardian's Lover - 3 ⭐️
The Captive Merman's Promise - 2 ⭐️