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A review by theheartofleo
Asunder by David Gaider
3.0
This is going to be an odd thing to say but... I liked the story but I didn't like the writing.
The story, overall, was good but the writing was just so... strange. There were be so many cuts and scene changes that it was confusing at times.
The worse was when the scene changed RIGHT AT A KEY PLOT MOMENT, SKIP THE ACTION OF THAT, AND GO RIGHT TO THE AFTERMATH.
I can understand a character getting knocked out and the scene moves on to them waking up... if there was only one POV we were following. We had multiple POVs though... in fact, a lot of those characters were in the same fight as the character that just got knocked out. Why couldn't we switch to THEIR POV and keep the action going?
And a lot of the scene breaks just seemed to be a ploy to add suspense but it just annoyed me more than anything because it followed the same line as the 'Character Knocked Out' switch. It wasn't needed, it denied us action, and it just wasn't good.
I still liked (most) of the characters though. I guess that's something.
The story, overall, was good but the writing was just so... strange. There were be so many cuts and scene changes that it was confusing at times.
The worse was when the scene changed RIGHT AT A KEY PLOT MOMENT, SKIP THE ACTION OF THAT, AND GO RIGHT TO THE AFTERMATH.
I can understand a character getting knocked out and the scene moves on to them waking up... if there was only one POV we were following. We had multiple POVs though... in fact, a lot of those characters were in the same fight as the character that just got knocked out. Why couldn't we switch to THEIR POV and keep the action going?
And a lot of the scene breaks just seemed to be a ploy to add suspense but it just annoyed me more than anything because it followed the same line as the 'Character Knocked Out' switch. It wasn't needed, it denied us action, and it just wasn't good.
I still liked (most) of the characters though. I guess that's something.