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A review by dyingotters
The Improbable Tales of Baskerville Hall by Ali Standish
1.75
Did not work as a novel nor as a Sherlock Holmes pastiche/Sherlock Holmes inspired story. A lot of potentials not carried out.
1. Undeveloped characters and unbuilt world. Having personality in your characters and world are arguably the most important things for your reader to like and relate to your story. I understand that this is for kids, and I'm not a kid, but children need engaging and relatable stories.
2. None of the elements in this story feel Sherlockian in its essence. Yes we have a Watson, but what is he except a doctor? Or Jimmie, or Irene, or Sebastian? And there are so many character names in canon Sherlock Holmes, why not name most or all of your characters after them? What if Dr. Grey was Dr. Clay? What if the Clover were the Irregulars? Even outside of names, there are so many effortless, obvious references you can make that would make the reading experience just a little more fun.
1. Undeveloped characters and unbuilt world. Having personality in your characters and world are arguably the most important things for your reader to like and relate to your story. I understand that this is for kids, and I'm not a kid, but children need engaging and relatable stories.
2. None of the elements in this story feel Sherlockian in its essence. Yes we have a Watson, but what is he except a doctor? Or Jimmie, or Irene, or Sebastian? And there are so many character names in canon Sherlock Holmes, why not name most or all of your characters after them? What if Dr. Grey was Dr. Clay? What if the Clover were the Irregulars? Even outside of names, there are so many effortless, obvious references you can make that would make the reading experience just a little more fun.