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A review by jaybatson
Dimensional Shift: Millenarians by Michelle Stone
2.0
Well, as I said about the first two books in this series, the concepts & story are fine. They're well-set into the mainstream of SciFi concepts. As in the first two, the author spends more words than typical SciFi books explaining the technology or SciFi concepts. In this final book of the series, the author comes full-circle to explains the background causes behind the concepts introduced in the first two books.
There's real potential in the series. BUT, as I indicated before, the writing level is not as high as the concepts / story. It feels almost like it's written for a young age bracket (e.g. teens), with fairly obvious, or unnecessary explanations or dialog. As I write this, I realize this is just another aspect of the author's style - the same aspect that gives rise to the lengthy explanations of the technology / SciFi concepts.
And, as in the first two, the editing, grammatical and punctuation errors are aggravating.
While I can't say for sure, since I'm not a writer, this series is probably a good case study of the value of having a large publisher (vs. self-publishing). This series of 3 books should probably have really been only one book, much more tightly written & edited. A mainstream publisher might have seen the potential in these books & this author, and assigned a really sharp editor to get the author to cut about 60% of the text, accelerate the pace of the story, discover more effective techniques to carry the story other than "quoted text as mental thought", and only go into detail when REALLY needed, e.g. the explanation of how the dimensional shift technology came to be, and works.
Sufficiently coached & edited, this author - and these books - could have turned into a 4 star review.
There's real potential in the series. BUT, as I indicated before, the writing level is not as high as the concepts / story. It feels almost like it's written for a young age bracket (e.g. teens), with fairly obvious, or unnecessary explanations or dialog. As I write this, I realize this is just another aspect of the author's style - the same aspect that gives rise to the lengthy explanations of the technology / SciFi concepts.
And, as in the first two, the editing, grammatical and punctuation errors are aggravating.
While I can't say for sure, since I'm not a writer, this series is probably a good case study of the value of having a large publisher (vs. self-publishing). This series of 3 books should probably have really been only one book, much more tightly written & edited. A mainstream publisher might have seen the potential in these books & this author, and assigned a really sharp editor to get the author to cut about 60% of the text, accelerate the pace of the story, discover more effective techniques to carry the story other than "quoted text as mental thought", and only go into detail when REALLY needed, e.g. the explanation of how the dimensional shift technology came to be, and works.
Sufficiently coached & edited, this author - and these books - could have turned into a 4 star review.