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Nimue: Freeing Merlin
by Ayn Cates Sullivan
I have many grievances with this book. Before I get into the plot holes and conveniences of the plot I have to mention a few over arcing issues. First was I had a hard time understanding who the audience was meant to be. Was the author aiming for people who were versed in Arthurian Legend or not. The author had a tendency to exposition dump one chapter and then the next leave you flipping to the glossary the next for additional details that could have easily been mentioned within the story.
As for typos it's a koi pond. I actually looked up in a dictionary to make sure that ponds couldn't be coy. And was the man named Cole Hen or Coel Hen? The author seemed to switch between these spellings often between one sentence and the next.
Now for the plot holes and the issues with the plot that really bothered me. First being what 17 year old American girl only uses her cell phone once to text her boyfriend a break-up? Where was the cell phone in London? Before you say American cell phones don't work in London, they do, factory unlocked iPhone will work in the UK. Also what mother let's her 17 year old daughter walk around ALONE without a cell phone?
The next bit is how Richie Rich, I mean Arhur Dent, I mean Nina should be a body floating in the Thames. She got into a random limo, made no effort to escape, at all from the limo (except doors were locked), from the limo driver after arriving at her destination, no effort when she was brought to Morgen. If Nina was a girl from Manhattan, no matter how sheltered her life, she'd have not been so ready to go along with everything.
I had a hard time trying to discover who the antagonist of the book was: Morgen? Christianity? Humanity? I could not connect with any character of the book nor find any character I didn't like except for the ill portrayal of modern day teenagers.
As for the Nimue story, it was in a word: Boring. Think of watching a movie on fast forward, it was like the author wanted this huge Infinity War style ending but was too impatient to actually write the story that would lead up to it. My best recommendation for this novel was it needed to be longer, fleshed out, it was more like an outline than anything. Take the time to write out events and not just use the conveniences of hearing someone else mention the spell, or she inuited it.
As for typos it's a koi pond. I actually looked up in a dictionary to make sure that ponds couldn't be coy. And was the man named Cole Hen or Coel Hen? The author seemed to switch between these spellings often between one sentence and the next.
Now for the plot holes and the issues with the plot that really bothered me. First being what 17 year old American girl only uses her cell phone once to text her boyfriend a break-up? Where was the cell phone in London? Before you say American cell phones don't work in London, they do, factory unlocked iPhone will work in the UK. Also what mother let's her 17 year old daughter walk around ALONE without a cell phone?
The next bit is how Richie Rich, I mean Arhur Dent, I mean Nina should be a body floating in the Thames. She got into a random limo, made no effort to escape, at all from the limo (except doors were locked), from the limo driver after arriving at her destination, no effort when she was brought to Morgen. If Nina was a girl from Manhattan, no matter how sheltered her life, she'd have not been so ready to go along with everything.
I had a hard time trying to discover who the antagonist of the book was: Morgen? Christianity? Humanity? I could not connect with any character of the book nor find any character I didn't like except for the ill portrayal of modern day teenagers.
As for the Nimue story, it was in a word: Boring. Think of watching a movie on fast forward, it was like the author wanted this huge Infinity War style ending but was too impatient to actually write the story that would lead up to it. My best recommendation for this novel was it needed to be longer, fleshed out, it was more like an outline than anything. Take the time to write out events and not just use the conveniences of hearing someone else mention the spell, or she inuited it.