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A review by behindthepages
Unclean Spirits by M.L.N. Hanover
1.0
Ugh what did I just read? This book is in dire need of a decent editor.
The concept of riders, demons that push out the souls of humans and take them over like a parasite, was interesting. However, no matter how much an idea catches my interest, the writing needs to be good quality. I can handle some cliches and bad grammar, but Hanover's writing was sluggish, like trying to dig down past the crap to find a few nuggets of decent writing.
My first problem: why give a character a name you won't use? Chogyi was given the name Jake to make it easier for Jayne to identify him. But instead the author refers to him as Chogyi Jake. Why? There is no other Jake to confuse him with. Then as the story progresses he's just Chogyi. Um, what?
Second problem: too many inconsistencies with point of view. For example, when Jayne first sees Coin, he's described as having tattoos, yet she mentions she can't see them. Why are you describing him with tattoos to the reader when your character can't even see them?
And the amount of cliches, grammar school descriptions and repetitious writing..... If I could give this no stars as an actual rating I would.
The concept of riders, demons that push out the souls of humans and take them over like a parasite, was interesting. However, no matter how much an idea catches my interest, the writing needs to be good quality. I can handle some cliches and bad grammar, but Hanover's writing was sluggish, like trying to dig down past the crap to find a few nuggets of decent writing.
My first problem: why give a character a name you won't use? Chogyi was given the name Jake to make it easier for Jayne to identify him. But instead the author refers to him as Chogyi Jake. Why? There is no other Jake to confuse him with. Then as the story progresses he's just Chogyi. Um, what?
Second problem: too many inconsistencies with point of view. For example, when Jayne first sees Coin, he's described as having tattoos, yet she mentions she can't see them. Why are you describing him with tattoos to the reader when your character can't even see them?
And the amount of cliches, grammar school descriptions and repetitious writing..... If I could give this no stars as an actual rating I would.