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darkpsychereads 's review for:
Hidden in Plain Sight
by T.S. Teller
This is unfortunately my first DNF. I read 50% and just couldn't force myself through the rest as I simply did not enjoy it, and struggled to understand what was going on. What possibly could have had potential as a concept, needed better context descriptors and character development to help readers understand where the setting is and how the characters are feeling through body language. For this reason, I couldn't connect with characters and found their dialogue/behaviour strange or confusing. I also felt quite bored, and hoped it would pick up, but it was sort of fruitless action throughout, with nothing for the reader to grasp.
The main problem which I feel could easily be improved is to focus on the jumpiness of writing.
For instance "The colorful orbs danced in the early morning sunlight, high in the stillness of the lower atmosphere, startling soaring birds as they drifted on cold air currents. Of course! It was perfect. Who could resist a free prize, especially an adrenaline addict who took every dare offered?"
Breakdown: 1) Orbs - need better clarification, as I was imagining actual glowing balls... for a character who is psychic, my field of possibilities is a little larger so a narrowing and simplicity is needed. 2) The sudden jump from this serene scene to "of course!" didn't transfer well, and further complicated the scene. There were many more mashed together descriptions with thoughts or dialogue just like this.
Sorry I couldn't finish this, I really tried.
Thank you to Netgalley, the author and to BHC Press for supplying this free ARC for a review. All the opinions expressed her are my own.
The main problem which I feel could easily be improved is to focus on the jumpiness of writing.
For instance "The colorful orbs danced in the early morning sunlight, high in the stillness of the lower atmosphere, startling soaring birds as they drifted on cold air currents. Of course! It was perfect. Who could resist a free prize, especially an adrenaline addict who took every dare offered?"
Breakdown: 1) Orbs - need better clarification, as I was imagining actual glowing balls... for a character who is psychic, my field of possibilities is a little larger so a narrowing and simplicity is needed. 2) The sudden jump from this serene scene to "of course!" didn't transfer well, and further complicated the scene. There were many more mashed together descriptions with thoughts or dialogue just like this.
Sorry I couldn't finish this, I really tried.
Thank you to Netgalley, the author and to BHC Press for supplying this free ARC for a review. All the opinions expressed her are my own.