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Harley Merlin and the Secret Coven
by Bella Forrest
DID NOT FINISH
DNF @ 38%.
The first third of the book is very promising and interesting. Once Harley starts meeting other "Magicals" it really goes down hill from there. There is a chapter where the author takes the opportunity to introduce no less than 10 characters by first and last name, full body description and background story. In. A. Row. It's at least 5 pages long, if not more. Even if they all play a significant role where ALL of this information is useful to the reader, it would mean that the author spent too much time character building and not enough time on the plot. That being said, plot doesn't appear to be much of a strong suit for this author, as she clearly plucked it out of Chamber of Secrets and made minor changes to fit her world (monsters mysteriously escaping a heavily guarded magical bestiary?).
Additionally, all the characters who are supposed to be early 20s are acting like 12 year-olds, taunting each other like they're on opposing dodge ball teams. Come on. This was touted as HP for adults.... and yet, the "adult" characters are written like children.
I'm over a third of the way through the book, and there is nothing of substance for me to care about, it's a C&P of CoS's plot, the characters are poorly written, and the author would rather tell you something than show you something. Save time and don't buy.
The first third of the book is very promising and interesting. Once Harley starts meeting other "Magicals" it really goes down hill from there. There is a chapter where the author takes the opportunity to introduce no less than 10 characters by first and last name, full body description and background story. In. A. Row. It's at least 5 pages long, if not more. Even if they all play a significant role where ALL of this information is useful to the reader, it would mean that the author spent too much time character building and not enough time on the plot. That being said, plot doesn't appear to be much of a strong suit for this author, as she clearly plucked it out of Chamber of Secrets and made minor changes to fit her world (monsters mysteriously escaping a heavily guarded magical bestiary?).
Additionally, all the characters who are supposed to be early 20s are acting like 12 year-olds, taunting each other like they're on opposing dodge ball teams. Come on. This was touted as HP for adults.... and yet, the "adult" characters are written like children.
I'm over a third of the way through the book, and there is nothing of substance for me to care about, it's a C&P of CoS's plot, the characters are poorly written, and the author would rather tell you something than show you something. Save time and don't buy.