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A review by vaxis
By Earth by T. Thorn Coyle
fast-paced
- Plot- or character-driven? Plot
- Strong character development? It's complicated
- Loveable characters? It's complicated
- Diverse cast of characters? Yes
- Flaws of characters a main focus? No
1.25
I'm assuming this is a first draft of a first novel, based on the fact that it felt like I was watching the technical skills level up in real time. This definitely wasn't beta'd and possibly only barely run through spell check, based on the missing punctuation, oddly repeated words, and other similar errors. Sentences were begun, and then clearly, a different thought would be replacing the original intent, with little or no effort to make sure that this change in direction was still coherent.
Things were weirdly repetitive. A paragraph would start with a direct statement such as being told this character is nervous in crowds. The paragraph would then talk at length about being nervous in crowds. Paragraph break, single sentence reiterating almost word for word the original direct statement.
And by direct statement I do mean it in a "never heard of show don't tell, and definitely was never told that advice means to show the emotions, how the emotions are felt, how they are expressed, how the other characters perceive it, etc." way.
This happened a lot through the entire book, but as I said, it did feel like I was witnessing technical skills being leveled up in real time. The further in, the less I saw it.
I. There is a lot I could say here, but assuming that this was written by a real person, I genuinely don't want to be mean. I think this is a good start of an idea and a world, I think that there is a lot of potential here. I did finish it. There are interesting elements here. It's just technically rough and feels unfinished.
Things were weirdly repetitive. A paragraph would start with a direct statement such as being told this character is nervous in crowds. The paragraph would then talk at length about being nervous in crowds. Paragraph break, single sentence reiterating almost word for word the original direct statement.
And by direct statement I do mean it in a "never heard of show don't tell, and definitely was never told that advice means to show the emotions, how the emotions are felt, how they are expressed, how the other characters perceive it, etc." way.
This happened a lot through the entire book, but as I said, it did feel like I was witnessing technical skills being leveled up in real time. The further in, the less I saw it.
I. There is a lot I could say here, but assuming that this was written by a real person, I genuinely don't want to be mean. I think this is a good start of an idea and a world, I think that there is a lot of potential here. I did finish it. There are interesting elements here. It's just technically rough and feels unfinished.